As part of a larger project, I am constructing a language (orromonda) from scratch which will be spoken by a closely humanoid species. I've created some simple literature to get the ball rolling, but I'm concerned that the language seems too artificial. I would like feedback on whether or not the snippets I provide sound like a conceivably natural language. More importantly, I need specific reasons as to why orromonda sounds one way or the other.
If the language comes across as unnatural to you:
- What specific phonemic changes may be beneficial?
- What aspects of the grammar or word order are uncanny?
- How is word construction affecting the flow of the language?
If it sounds fairly natural to you:
- Are there any noticeable aspects that stand out as not "fitting" in?
- What specific phonemic and structural aspects make it sound this way to you?
Now I'll quickly break down the language. For ease of typing, I have not used IPA notation; rather, all consonants make the sounds you would expect from English except for j which is pronounced like the /zh/ in "vision". The vowels 'a', 'e', and 'i' are pronounced as short vowels, and 'o', 'u', 'ā', 'ē', and 'ī' are pronounced as long vowels.
Vosa bundath vuf gamadotra Ganimond.
First to board was fine Ganimond.
Note that most adjectives end in '-a' (a few end in '-or'). The verb here is "vuf" whose infinitive is "vith" with an unvoiced /th/.
... vīelen jee trasilīz katāl du ...
... foes who will try to break you ...
In this bit it is seen that the infinitive is not used as expected but that the second verb takes on the same conjugation as the first.
I can provide more information if called for, but my post is already quite long. Thank you in advance :)